{"id":99,"date":"2019-03-16T16:34:37","date_gmt":"2019-03-16T23:34:37","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/?p=99"},"modified":"2025-07-21T21:18:31","modified_gmt":"2025-07-22T04:18:31","slug":"shattered-worlds-shattered-and-rebuilt","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/2019\/03\/16\/shattered-worlds-shattered-and-rebuilt\/","title":{"rendered":"Shattered Worlds: Shattered and Rebuilt"},"content":{"rendered":"\n<p>I finally had my short story critiqued by someone who knows how to write novels, and well&#8230; He said I have a good story and did my conversational text well, but my story was doing a lot of TELL and not SHOW in many places. I knew about this concept but somehow I was blind to it until Drew went through it with me and showed me where I was doing it and how I could make it better. Now it seems so obvious to me. I am surprised how I didn&#8217;t realize it before. <br><br>So this week I did some major revisions to &#8220;Shattered Worlds&#8221;. I added a lot more character dialog to replace the boring telling I had let creep into the text. I added more physical description of character actions SHOWING what they were feeling and pulled out the plopping down of overt motivations and emotions which I was just TELLING the reader.<br><br>I am sure it is not done yet, but I am feeling a lot better about it now, and I think this short advice that Drew gave me really brought some new life to my story. Really appreciate your &#8220;brutal review&#8221; <a href=\"https:\/\/twitter.com\/drewwagar\">@drewwagar<\/a>.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>I finally had my short story critiqued by someone who knows how to write novels, and well&#8230; He said I have a good story and did my conversational text well, but my story was doing a lot of TELL and not SHOW in many places. I knew about this concept but somehow I was blind &hellip; <a href=\"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/2019\/03\/16\/shattered-worlds-shattered-and-rebuilt\/\" class=\"more-link\">Continue reading<span class=\"screen-reader-text\"> &#8220;Shattered Worlds: Shattered and Rebuilt&#8221;<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"closed","ping_status":"closed","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"footnotes":""},"categories":[4,3],"tags":[11,9,7,10,8],"class_list":["post-99","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-sci-fi","category-writing","tag-critique","tag-editing","tag-sci-fi","tag-short-story","tag-writing"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/99","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=99"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/99\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":100,"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/99\/revisions\/100"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=99"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=99"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/glennfrank.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=99"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}